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Comet! an Ell Donsaii story #5 eBook Laurence Dahners

Sorry, but I finally found a book in the series that disappointed me. I am uncertain if the author was past his deadline, had several bad days of writing, writers block, or just was sick while writing it, but this one was boring. Not much action, a lot of science, page after page after page. I actually found myself flipping through pages looking for something interesting. First time I have had to do this in this series.
The scenes were identical from all the previous books, just with different bad guys and a whole lot of science talk.
I am moving forward in the series and moving on to book number six, Tau Ceti. I am hoping the author has gotten out of his slump and the future issues will be as entertaining as I found the first four.
Everyone has a bad day and a bad book. Lets just scratch this one off and move forward.
You could almost skip this one in the series. Almost. Regretfully, you have to read it to move on.
Better luck next time.


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Comet! an Ell Donsaii story #5 eBook Laurence Dahners Reviews

This is a wonderful series that tells a super hero story of a down to earth woman who is both athletically gifted and a genius level physicist and mathematician. Sounds boring said that way but the plots are very well thought out, the science is plausible and the characters are compelling. When reading these types of books I am ofter let down when the author doesn't have a cohesive story line or where they fail to keep the science or the character's "real". I've read 10 of the fourteen books in the series so far and have not been disappointed by any of them. GREAT READS!
I've written this review with aspiring self-published authors in mind

Do you want to write a Mary Sue story? Do you want to tell a tale about a character with a genius-level intellect, preternaturally physically gifts, supermodel looks, who never really puts a foot wrong, never really loses her temper, handles every situation with calm and aplomb, rises above provocations both intentional and unintended? Do you want to put her in a world where only the worst of men oppose her, everyone else misunderstanding her potential despite her genuine and proven accomplishments and abilities, eventually to be won over by her overwhelming humility and prowess? Then take this book as a model on how to do it. I'm serious - I'm not a fan of Mary Sues, but this series is absolutely the pinnacle of its type.

A lot of Mary Sues just give their characters awards and abilities without justifying them. But Dahners gives his character a basis in realistic-sounding pseudoscience and a proper foundation for all of her abilities. By the time this book ends, Ell Donsai has four Olympic gold medals in gymnastics that she won by benefit of her mental and physical abilities. She has a Medal of Honor, won for an act that actually would get the Medal of Honor in real life. She has revolutionized the communications industry and space travel, and created a technology with the genuine potential to transform human life. She has created an entirely new area of mathematics beyond the comprehension of almost everyone, gone from poverty to having nearly a trillion dollars, saved all of the astronauts on the International Space Station, and by the end of this book, won the Nobel Prize for physics and saved the world from impending cometary doom. With no signs whatsoever of any arrogance or hints of an existence of an ego.

All of this before she turns twenty-one. (And she never takes advantage of any opportunities to drink illicitly!)

Sorry if I spoiled anything there, but if you didn't expect that after reading the previous five books, you may wish to check out Dick and Jane. The plot twist at the end will leave you stunned. And shattered. Sha-ttered.

I know that I come across a little tongue-in-cheek, but I'm serious. This is a Mary Sue worth reading. Action scenes are excellent. Dialogue is outstanding. Pseudoscience and invention scenes, expertly done. And it's all done with a contagious enthusiasm.

Of course, character development is lacking, but what do you expect? Ell is the quintessential Mary Sue; she is literally perfect from the beginning of the series. Her only real problem is that there aren't any men who are really good enough for her. The author tries, but up to the end of Book Five, he never can quite pull it off. There is a tacit acknowledgment that neither Phil (highly intelligent, "Norse God" attractive, and an Olympic medaller himself) or Roger (even more intelligent) come anywhere near Ell.

One small quibble in this book, they use the claim that "one may not shout 'fire!' in a crowded theatre" to shut up someone who wants to warn the world about the coming cometary apocalypse. That's not true. One absolutely can shout "fire!" in a crowded theatre - particularly if it is on fire. Also, prior restraint almost always unconstitutional, etc, blah, blah.

This review is for Books 1 through 5. I am a little burnt out now, so I am going to take a break from the series. Nevertheless Recommended for pleasant, escapist reading. Highly recommended as a primer for bad self-published authors who beat their readers to death with poorly conceived Mary Sue characters. If you can't figure out how to write a realistic character with reasonable character development, this book is very definitely the next best thing.
Details and thoughts about this book. (SPOILER WARNING)

1. Is it an action book? No. This book is more about emotions and relationship conflicts than anything else. The tension building existence of the `comet' isn't the main topic of the book, by far. Its only function is as a means to further aggrandize Ell. The 'comet' is really Ell.

2. Who is the target audience? Mostly ladies, teenage girls, super hero aficionados and those with an interest in sci-fi technology. Previous books had more aspects that appealed to a broader audience.

3. How good is the character development? In my very personal opinion, most of the characters have static roles. Some characters evolve within the scope of their static roles, but do not diverge further than that. I find Ell to be a `relationship wise' immature girl and believe that to be a positive aspect for the book. There is something very right about seeing such shallowness and personality flaws in an otherwise perfect super-princess. Roger's character is well written with his infatuation with Ell. I find the confusion of how to deal with a teenage love interest to be ... well ... properly confusing.

4. Are the characters likable? In my very personal opinion, lukewarm. Ell takes for granted Roger's affection in a big way, as she does every other love interest's affection. She isn't serious with anyone and even a little cruel in her emotional disregard. Yet, it is her right to be so immature. She IS nineteen and is at the age of exploration. It takes until Chapter 10 for her to realize how selfish she's been.

It is Roger's reactions that make me dislike him (though, again, good writing). I can't, personally, abide emotional masochism in an otherwise smart man. He is NOT nineteen. If Ell cannot see that Roger loved her mind and personality, without the need for the looks that everyone seems to be so fixated on (that's very rare), it's her loss. He is a grown man. Keep a good friendly relationship but go find someone that can appreciate such maturity. Let Phil (the almost rapist turned love interest. Seriously?) deal with all the other `boyfriends'.

Secondary characters do not evolve to the point of being proactive individuals. Secondary characters don't act beyond the wishes, margins or knowledge imposed by the main character. For example, Emma doesn't go after Roger unless she discusses it with Ell first. Inventions aren't done without Ell having some partial knowledge of what's going on. Tertiary characters are more individual from Ell than secondary characters. Go figure

5. Does the story keep its pacing? Honestly, it depends on the target audience. I'm sure a lot of people will love the `multiple guys one girl' scenario. It's a little too soap opera for me. The constant party venues that Ell keeps going to in a contradictory attempt to NOT stand out, grow thin. There are a lot of those and by now it's all meh, to me. The entire book feels like a fluff piece in spite, not with, an eventual `comet' incident. In fact, the COMET is fluff. Nothing really exciting happens because of it, except for *drum roll* a party. I skimmed many pages without regret.

6. Is the story believable? The story is generally believable, with a few exceptions. Ell continues to unnecessarily create enemies by not being smart about what she reveals to people. One of the contention arks in this book was completely avoidable with but a little forethought. It's like there doesn't exist anyone around Ell that says `maybe we should take this a little slow'. I mean people `SAY' the words, but no one really significantly acts on it. Not a single character breaks from the `groupie-idol' mentality to halt Ell in her tracks with a good reality check. Read above `static roles'. Moreover, beyond a victim-abusive-perverted dependency, I have -never- heard of an almost rapist (remember Phil had to be knocked out to stop pawing Ell and for the longest time HATED her for stopping him) having a meaningful best bud relationship with an intended target. Finally, the decision to cut out Donsaii (a proven quantity and quality of miracles) from helping prevent an extinction event, because her company is `civilian', is beyond unreasonable. This strains my disbelief. There are quite a few civilian contractors with Top-Secret ratings.

7. IS the price worth it? Understand that this is my personal opinion. I say no. I believe $2.99 or $1.99 would have been a better value, given the length of the book, and the empty events within it. Empty events are what I call seemingly important events that are resolved in a manner that has little entertaining value to the reader.

In conclusion This is a credible teenage soap opera book with a sci-fi twist. There are a lot of pizza and dancing scenes that aren't, personally, interesting in the least. The main character stands within the threshold of being unlikable. That fact is brought about by good and solid emotional/inexperience flaws to offset her physical and intellectual infallibility. Secondary characters leave much to be desired, and don't evolve a lot within their roles. The antagonist characters are unremarkable. The story is rather predictable. Challenges are overcome in unexciting manners. It is a full on filler book that somehow manages to be mildly entertaining. I recommend this book for the target audience.

3 stars.
Sorry, but I finally found a book in the series that disappointed me. I am uncertain if the author was past his deadline, had several bad days of writing, writers block, or just was sick while writing it, but this one was boring. Not much action, a lot of science, page after page after page. I actually found myself flipping through pages looking for something interesting. First time I have had to do this in this series.
The scenes were identical from all the previous books, just with different bad guys and a whole lot of science talk.
I am moving forward in the series and moving on to book number six, Tau Ceti. I am hoping the author has gotten out of his slump and the future issues will be as entertaining as I found the first four.
Everyone has a bad day and a bad book. Lets just scratch this one off and move forward.
You could almost skip this one in the series. Almost. Regretfully, you have to read it to move on.
Better luck next time.